Help me with a little story? Please?
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Help me with a little story? Please?
I'm trying to finish a little story for a secret santa event on livejournal, and I need to be done on the 30th. We were given a promt, the likes/dislikes and favorite pairing of the secret person, and we won't know who we are writing for until we have delivered our story.
But I need someone to read through it and help me with spelling, language and overall consistency. And if you have an idea or two for improvement, that would be nice too. (I seem to be a bit stuck, or maybe a bit paralyzed in fear of disappointing the receiver. I am SO looking forward to read the story I'll get, and feel mine is too short and rushed and meh...)
It's Merlin fandom and slash fic (cuddling cute stuff, nothing graphic) but it's modern AU so you don't really have to know the characters at all. About 1000 words.
Would you help me be a good santa?
![santa](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_santa.png)
But I need someone to read through it and help me with spelling, language and overall consistency. And if you have an idea or two for improvement, that would be nice too. (I seem to be a bit stuck, or maybe a bit paralyzed in fear of disappointing the receiver. I am SO looking forward to read the story I'll get, and feel mine is too short and rushed and meh...)
It's Merlin fandom and slash fic (cuddling cute stuff, nothing graphic) but it's modern AU so you don't really have to know the characters at all. About 1000 words.
Would you help me be a good santa?
![santa](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_santa.png)
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
pm or email me it Amarie and I will give it a read through later today and give you my thoughts.
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
Here to help as Odo might say.
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
i could look over spelling if you'd like and read through it too perhaps
i am sort of in the Merlin fandom ![Wink](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_wink.gif)
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
![:carrot:](/users/1813/32/54/71/smiles/2217289918.gif)
- Not really a spoiler:
- My first thought when seeing Bennyboy as Sherlock was: OMG! A Colin Morgan I can drool over without it being (too) creepy!
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
I will look too if you like. But grammar and spelling is not my forte.
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
But you do know how to tell a story.
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
well i am drooling...Amarië wrote:A PM is heading your way pronto!
- Not really a spoiler:
My first thought when seeing Bennyboy as Sherlock was: OMG! A Colin Morgan I can drool over without it being (too) creepy!
Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
Again?
You seem to have more that enough expertise at hand already Amarië, so you probably don't need my help. But you shall of course have it if you need it.
From what I've read of your writing it'll probably turn out great.![Nod](/users/1813/32/54/71/smiles/1918643206.gif)
![Laughing](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_lol.gif)
You seem to have more that enough expertise at hand already Amarië, so you probably don't need my help. But you shall of course have it if you need it.
From what I've read of your writing it'll probably turn out great.
![Nod](/users/1813/32/54/71/smiles/1918643206.gif)
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
Oh you are too charming.
I think I have the help I need now. I knew I could rely on the Shire.
I think I have the help I need now. I knew I could rely on the Shire.
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
If you needed a bit of sauce, I think I might know someone who could help...
I also know someone who has a very extensive provacative vegetables and fruit collection...
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
Amarië wrote:Oh you are too charming.
What? Me?
![Shocked](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_eek.gif)
Well, maybe a little bit.
![Very Happy](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_biggrin.png)
Still I did just use your joke at Petty over in the Freedom thread just like my character used it at Pettys character in your Bandersnatch story.
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Will there be any more Bandersnatch writing by the way? I was quite enjoying that one.
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
I had to do this secret santa thing and another other story first, but there will be more of Bandersnatchers and Work-a-hobbit soon now, I hope. ![Smile](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_smile.gif)
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-Mrs Figg
"Everything we hear is an opinion, not a fact. Everything we see is a perspective, not the truth."
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
I'm glad someone else said that, as I might have come across as oh so girly.
But, yeah ... what Norc said.![Nod](/users/1813/32/54/71/smiles/1918643206.gif)
![Laughing](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_lol.gif)
But, yeah ... what Norc said.
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“We're doomed,” he says, casually. “There's no question about that. But it's OK to be doomed because then you can just enjoy your life."
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
Amarië wrote:I'm trying to finish a little story for a secret santa event on livejournal, and I need to be done on the 30th. We were given a promt, the likes/dislikes and favorite pairing of the secret person, and we won't know who we are writing for until we have delivered our story.
But I need someone to read through it and help me with spelling, language and overall consistency. And if you have an idea or two for improvement, that would be nice too. (I seem to be a bit stuck, or maybe a bit paralyzed in fear of disappointing the receiver. I am SO looking forward to read the story I'll get, and feel mine is too short and rushed and meh...)
It's Merlin fandom and slash fic (cuddling cute stuff, nothing graphic) but it's modern AU so you don't really have to know the characters at all. About 1000 words.
Would you help me be a good santa?
It's that time of the year again and I should have had my story finished, beta read and sent yesterday.
![:facepalm:](/users/1813/32/54/71/smiles/1625187496.gif)
Can anyone offer an emergency read through of the mess I've made?
It's Merlin fandom, canon age, AU, pairing is Gwaine/Merlin (nothing explicit) and sort of Merlin/Morgana but not really. Plot may remind you of the episode "servant of two masters". And it kept growing, so it's approx. 4k words.
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-Mrs Figg
"Everything we hear is an opinion, not a fact. Everything we see is a perspective, not the truth."
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#amarieco
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
I am not very up on Merlin fanfic Amarie- so not sure I can be of any help with detail or characters- but I can proof read it for you if thats any good?
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
Oh yes please!
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
Bung it a pm and send it to me Amarie- or email me it- whichever.
I am about to go out for lunch but I will be able to take a look over it once I get home later this afternoon.
I am about to go out for lunch but I will be able to take a look over it once I get home later this afternoon.
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
sorry I am no use, my grammar is terrible. I split clauses.
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
Explains why Santa can cover so many homes in such short time.
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
I'm probably to late to help out again, (for the second year running
) but of course, if you still need it. ![Smile](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_smile.gif)
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Re: Help me with a little story? Please?
It's already delivered and the receiver sounded quite thrilled, but thank you anyway. ![Wink](https://2img.net/i/fa/i/smiles/icon_wink.gif)
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